Many people are working longer and longer hours. What are the reasons and effects?

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Nowadays
people
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are running
behindwith
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behind with
a lot of commitments so they need to earn more money to afford their lavishing lifestyle .Everywhere shows a repeated
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which
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people
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's desires beyond their financial limits ,
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long
time
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working will impact
humans
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health.
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, The advent of technology is used to market new products in the world so
people
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tend to the new ones which
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a lot of facilities.In past decades most
people
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did not use cars most of the
time
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because they don't have the financial ability to buy those things but now
mostly
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have
a
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good paying jobs and wealthy lifestyles so we have a chance to buy
a trendy cars
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and the market
also
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shows huge models of cars .Middle-class
people
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also
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work
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a long
time
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to fulfil their dreams and they are looking into family commitments. Currently , Everyone's needs
to be
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based on their wish and their needy products set their status in society,
,
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additionally
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marketing technology
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tempts
youngsters'
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with curiosity about new products so they will fall the
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adverts.The human body needs rest after
work
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but most of them did not get proper sleep and
people
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continue night and day shift
work
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for getting
a high salaries
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.
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, a recent Hindu article published most youngsters are affected
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by obesity
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and blood pressure
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long
time
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work
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and stress.
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have a lot of needs to fulfil our life so we need money but we have to care about our health and must follow a healthy lifestyle .
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