There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

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of factors to be considered when an employee

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to stay with the same institution and others think that

money

is the ultimate

reason

. I disagree with

this

statement and believe that the

reasons

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workers

are encourage

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to work in

same

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company

because

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they value respect and harmony among

workers

. There are people who decided to work with the same company because of

work

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ethics

that is

being observed by the

workers

In addition

money

cannot buy happiness

this

one

of the main

reason

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reasons

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why people respect

one

another.

Moreover

this

characterictic

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characteristic

will bring success to the employees and

institution

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the institution

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, the ER nurses and doctors most of the time faces critical situation and everyone is under time pressure. The team successfully manage the situation by being calm and polite

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each other. Another

reason

why I disagree

that

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money

is the main

reason

because

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harmonious relationship among employees is far much

important

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and worth it to remain in

same

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the same

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company. Apart from that, if a person is already comfortable and

gain

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the trust of everyone

then

this

one

main factor to

considered

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not leaving the job. Successfully gaining rapport among colleagues is

one

of the workes

achievement

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achievements

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, statistic shows that

workers

tend to stay in the same

workplace

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because they fear leaving their workmates. In conclusion, employees stayed in the same workplace where they are

being

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admired and gained

harmonious

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a harmonious

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relationship

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relationships

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with co-

workers

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is why

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disagree that

money

is the main

reason

saty

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stay

in the same institution.

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Varied vocabulary

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