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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #income
Truly,
education
 is an integral part of the success of a person,
Although
 some argue that tertiary
education
 should be paid for by the
student
 only, I,
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 disagree with
this
 view and I awfully believe that it should be free as it will improve our economy and
also
student
 can focus on their study very well. Building up our country's economy is a big factor why, I believe, that
education
 should be free for all regardless of your status, in my opinion even if teenagers have bright minds and are very good at school, and if their family is not well off, they tend to not continue their studies because of very high
tuition
 fees. If that happens they cannot find a very good job and maybe they become jobless.
For example
, my cousin in my home country, because in my country no free
education
 and here parents cannot afford his
tuition
 fees,
that is
 why he drops out of school and he tries to find a good job but can't find one, and now he is jobless. Another thing
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 is when they suggest that it is not free, and the family of the
student
 , does not have enough money or is short of budget to a fee for the
tuition
, and now the
student
 looks for
part-time
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 job to cover her
tuition
 fees. It is not good because students cannot focus very well on their studies. In conclusion, I believe, that
education
 should be free to all students, Regardless of their status, because it can boost our economy and prevent a high unemployment rate in our society.
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