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Some people say that ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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people
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 tend towards the viewpoint that soonly, reading
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 and news online will overpower paper
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 and newspapers. I would have to support the idea that even though ebooks have some undeniable benefits, there are still some fascinating factors about owning a collection of
books
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. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that online
books
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 are beneficial for readers. One of the main reasons can be that owning
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 online could be more economical.
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 is because
people
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 can enjoy the same
books
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 with a digital copy of them, which is definitely cheaper than owning a physical
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.
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, it is certainly not as space-taking as owning a bookshelf, since every copy is neatly stored in the user's Kindles, phones, or tablets. Another reason
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 that online newspapers
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 the news as soon as possible,
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,
people
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 will catch up with the latest gossip much faster than waiting for the printed ones.
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, I agree with the viewpoint that having a book collection lying on the shelves sounds attractive. The main reason is that the feeling
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 the newly released
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 of
people
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's favourite book is unmatchable.
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 is because most collectors only can appreciate what they are reading by owning the physical
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 of it. A second point is that most individuals
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 distracted if they are doing their reading on electronic devices.
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 reported by Nha Nam Bookstore in 2021 that 54% of their buyers claimed that buying a hard copy of their favourite
books
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 can motivate them to finish it better than just leaving it undone as an online
version
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. In conclusion,
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 owning ebooks sounds promising, I strongly believe that traditional paper still has its way to continue and thrive.

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