Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work

Nowadays

teenagers

are asked to work part-

time

by

parents

to earn money.

While

some people argue that

this

way they will understand and appreciate basic lessons about work,

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others

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believe that

parents

should let them free to spend

time

for rest, sport and after-school activities.

This

essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in

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of

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the latter

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. On the one hand, as a

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I think

teenagers

should work part-

time

to be introduced

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a sort of anteroom of what is going to happen in the future. They are basically asked to understand the minimum requirements of the working world.

Moreover

, they can have the opportunity to become more disciplined,

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earn money devoted to their own expenses and, somehow,

to

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contribute to the family budget.

On the other hand

,

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adolescence is, without a doubt, an awesome period of

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teens

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life, especially for those of them who spend

time

for

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after-school activities,

sport

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,

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and need rest that cannot be sacrificed. What’s more, I clearly remember when I was a teenager. At that

time

I had the awareness that I was requested to have my own responsibilities,

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doing homework or following

strictly

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rules set up by my

parents

.

However

, I was available to completely appreciate

spare

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time

and deeply live my life with

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. In my opinion,

teenagers

shouldn’t sacrifice their rest and adolescence period working part-

time

, since discipline and

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money worth depends mainly on the values instilled in them by their

parents

. In conclusion, as far as I’m concerned, with reference to

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teenagers

, working part-

time

can be a good chance to sway

over

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their personality.

However

, I fully and firmly believe adolescence is crucial in the growing up trajectory of life and

teenagers

should spend

time

to strongly appreciate their

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life

.