The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph indicates the
oversease
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overseas
visitors to the coast, mountains and
the
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lakes in a European country during the
period
of 1987 -2007. As per the
graph
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,graph
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we could see the visit to the lakes have a gradual increase
upto
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up to
the year 2007, and it reaches
the
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a
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peak during the
the
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period
of 2002, and after
that
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there is a slight drop. The tourist visiting the mountain has a slight increase
throught
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through
throughout
the
period
from 1987 to 2007, and it's in between the twenty thousand to
thirty five
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thousand people visiting. When we see the people visiting the
coatal
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coastal
areas we could see there is a minor drop during the
period
1992 but
thereafter
we could notice a tremendous increase. We could conclude that the
visitors
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number of visitors
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would
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who would
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like to visit the coastal places is higher when compared to the mountain and
the lakes areas
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the areas of the lake
the areas of the lakes
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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