The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph indicates the
oversease
visitors to the coast, mountains and Correct your spelling
overseas
the
lakes in a European country during the Correct article usage
apply
period
of 1987 -2007.
As per the graph
we could see the visit to the lakes have a gradual increase Add a comma
,graph
upto
the year 2007, and it reaches Correct your spelling
up to
the
peak during the Correct article usage
a
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
period
of 2002, and after that
there is a slight drop.
The tourist visiting the mountain has a slight increase Add a comma
,that
throught
the Correct your spelling
through
throughout
period
from 1987 to 2007, and it's in between the twenty thousand to thirty five
thousand people visiting.
When we see the people visiting the Add a hyphen
thirty-five
coatal
areas we could see there is a minor drop during the Correct your spelling
coastal
period
1992 but thereafter
we could notice a tremendous increase.
We could conclude that the visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
would
like to visit the coastal places is higher when compared to the mountain and Correct pronoun usage
who would
the lakes areas
.Change to a genitive case
the areas of the lake
the areas of the lakes
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