With an increasing overweight population some people think that universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses. To what extent do you agree?
With the rapid improvement of
human’s
quality of life in Change noun form
human
this
contemporary society, there are tremendous entertainment factors which could cater to people’s needs. Obviously, some people are extremely indulging in amusements and it may bring some negative impacts on their bodies, such
as obesity and diabetes. These days, an issue that has fuelled a heated debate is whether universities have to require whole students
to do exercises on campus as the sustained growth of overweight
population. Correct article usage
the overweight
While
it is maintained by some that it is unnecessary to have sports, others hold the opposite opinion. In
my perspective, Change preposition
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inclined
towards the former idea to a larger extent.
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am inclined
i
would lend my support to the Change the capitalization
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view point
that universities must make physical Correct your spelling
viewpoint
education
an obligatory module on all degree courses, chiefly based on the consideration that there are a lot of recreational facilities, massage chair
, that may precipitate Fix the agreement mistake
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students
to over-relax. This
may bring some detrimental health problems, like obesity, as they encounter reduced
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the reduced
a reduced
level
of standard exercise, which contributes to the accumulation of excessive fats in their body. Fix the agreement mistake
levels
Thus
, physical education
is extremely important in ensuring and maintaining students
’ overall
well beings.
Additionally
, another point should
not be overlooked is that there are versatile food choices nowadays, people are able to select what they are most likely to consume for their Correct pronoun usage
that should
meal
.
Paradoxically, the majority of Fix the agreement mistake
meals
students
are willing to sacrifice their time
and energy on
their studies Change preposition
for
instead
of choosing a healthy meal. Therefore
, they may tend to consume fast food, such
as McDonald’s and Subway, as a means to utilise their time
more effectively on
their academic pursuit. For Change preposition
in
instances
, Fix the agreement mistake
instance
according to
a report made by BBC in 2017, there are 61.2% of teenagers possessed adipose due to
their long-term consumption of fast food. Consequently
, university
need to make physical activities a mandatory part of the curriculum.
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universities
However
, i
understand why it could be sometimes claimed by some that it is unnecessary for Change the capitalization
I
students
to have physical activity in
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on
campus
. The reason may involve the recognition that Add an article
the campus
universities’
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universities
students
are facing more challenges in their cut-throat academic competitiveness. This
is because the
limited amount of job opportunities on the uneven playing field Change preposition
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,
so Remove the comma
apply
that
they need to make more effort in their academic performance Correct word choice
apply
instead
of participating sports
. Change preposition
in sports
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the education
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in university
is increased Add an article
the university
5.3
% Change preposition
by 5.3
since
from 2012 to 2019. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, it demonstrates that sports could be futile and pointless in
some extent.
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although
the claim that physical education
is unnecessary in
some extent, my firm conviction is that it is paramount for Change preposition
to
students
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an obligatory module on
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students
need to plan their time
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