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Many countries use fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of the alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this development?

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Alternative sources of
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 as wind
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 and solar
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 in some countries are being couraged to be used as the replacement for fossil fuels like coal, oil and natural gas. From my perspective, I would agree with the policy about shifting initiatives from non-renewable
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 to renewable
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. Nonrenewable
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 may carry some benefits for some countries
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 as Saudi Arabia and Russia because they have a lot of resources,
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 the demand for them increases over the year. But the ugly truth is, those fuel resources
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 brought harm to our environment. We can agree to disagree but the earth nowadays is heading to critical levels
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 climate change and if we not trying to stop it, in the future, we may never see our blue planet liveable again. For the sake of a greener environment, and the future generation's life, we need to make the
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-shifting initiative into a mandatory policy for every
country
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 in the world to implement it. Some advanced countries were already to took part in
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 initiative. The Netherlands is one of them.
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country
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 is proof that green
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 can light up a nation. They used plenty of windmills, advancing the wind
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 to drive the propeller
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 generating the power to energise the whole
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. Despite the success story, the Netherlands only had less than five hundred thousand miles per square area,
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 may become an issue for a
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 with a larger area
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 the coverage will exponentially wider and
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 costing a lot more money. In conclusion, encouraging the use of renewable
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 to replace non-renewable one should be the top priority for every
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 to preserve nature and its sustainability,
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on the other hand
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, it
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 brings issues because it cost many resources to build it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • energy independence
  • climate change
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructural development
  • technological innovation
  • economic disruption
  • fossil fuel depletion
  • energy transition
  • consistency and reliability
  • wildlife habitat
  • natural landscapes
  • solar panels
  • wind turbines
  • energy consumption
  • ecological balance
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