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In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

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Youngesters
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Youngsters
 in several nations
are
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 involved in work in one way or the other to gain money. many
indidivals
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individuals
 are
with
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 the view that
this
 practice is
inappriopriate
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inappropriate
meanwhlie
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meanwhile
 other party thinks it is an important form of working experience.
Children
 are the most vital
as well as
fragile
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 asset of a nation.
children
 of late have the habit of spending most of their time on unuseful activities like playing video games, watching cartoons etc. It is of
this
 view that adult in the nation thinks that these kids can be productive to the family
as well as
 gain some working skills if they are engaged in
income generating
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 work rather than wasting their precious time lazing about. Others in the countries
however
 dispute
this
 fact in that they are too weak to be involved in working.
this
 essay will talk about
about
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both the advantages and the drawbacks of
this
 act.
Firstly
,
children
 who are engaged in skills training at
this
 age turn
to
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 have of great advantage over their
collagues
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colleagues
 who did not get
such
privillage
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privilege
privileges
.
for
example
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 a child who
get
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 the opportunity to be
enroll
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 in a fashion school during vacation period will end up getting
an
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handwork
that
is
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as
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 sewing
of
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cloth
whereas
 the one who stayed at home watching television will not gain
such
 skills.
Conversely
, as we all know school vacation or break is a time to rest the mind and the body. not all
children
 have what it takes to stand
stress
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. if
such
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 youngster is forced into jobs at
this
 stage, they will end up breaking down
psychologicall
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psychological
psychologically
.
However
,
i
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 believe that a parent must know the
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strength
strenght
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strength
 of the ward so as to know whether to involve the child in work or not
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