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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are.on the other hand, it also isolates us and encourage people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements.

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It is undeniable that the internet allows us to stay connected with each other. At the same ,time it causes loneliness and encourages anti-social behaviour.
Although
, technology has enriched our lives with better communication tools it has
also
 encouraged some undesirable behaviours.
Firstly
, there is no denying
about
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the positive changes the internet has brought into our lives, communication has improved drastically as one can talk to someone who is
in
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 another continent with ease.
Secondly
, the increase in the number of social media platforms
such
 as Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube has
for instance
 enabled individuals who have the same interests to meet and interact without the need to meet physically.
However
, overreliance on
this
 form of interaction can be detrimental to our well-being as it gives individuals a false sense of security.
This
 could pose a challenge. when it comes to actually meeting the person face to face. To sum it up, social skills cultivation should be something each and every person endeavour to achieve as it is important for us to coexist with each other.
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