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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The provided line graph compares the average emissions of carbon dioxide in three countries ( the UK,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal ) between 1967 and 2007. The figures are measured in metric tonnes.
Overall
, Italy and Portugal showed an
increament
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increase
 throughout the period,
while
Sweden
 and the United Kindom denoted a decline.
Besides
, the amount of CO2 emission is similar in 2007 for
Sweden
 and Portugal. In 1967, Italy started at around 4.5
MT
 of carbon dioxide and climbed steadily in the next decade and reached
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just over 6MT.
Then
, continued a slow growth till 1997, which accounted for 8MT before
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of
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 in
next
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 10 years.
Similarly
, Portugal began at 1.2MT and increased gradually till 1987 and rose
suddently
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suddenly
 in 1997 to approximately 5MT. After that, Portugal's CO2 emission was at a
snail
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 speed. Opposed
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that, the United Kingdom experienced a steady decline
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around 11MT to 9.5
MT
 during the period
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 1967 to 2017.
Finally
,
Sweden
's emission of CO2 was at around 9MT and reached
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a peak of just over 10MT in 1977, before witnessing a fall in
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 three decades.
However
, it accounted for less than 6MT of CO2 in 2007, which was the same figure for Portugal in that year.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, co, mt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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