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Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The world is currently split between two opposite beliefs: those individuals who sustain that the government must guarantee the right to free online
access
 to every citizen and those who state that it should be paid individually just like many other services.
Although
internet
access
 may arguably be considered
as
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a service, I think that letting
people
having
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 free
access
 to it must be considered
as
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necessary. By taking into consideration the current human generations and the ascending role of technology in their everyday lives, it appears clear how allowing everyone to have free
access
 is fundamental. Nowadays every kind of information, public and private alike can be found online and those can undeniably help
people
 in their daily actions and plans. Tracking a place’s location
while
 being able to get there with
real time
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 information about traffics would not be possible
withouth
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without
Internet
access
as well as
 researching and collecting data for academic or other purposes in the easiest but most exhaustive way could not be possible, not even through
libraries’
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 resources. It is inevitable that providing
people
 with free
internet
access
 is a benefit for both citizens and
government
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the government
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 too since its population can be more educated easily.
Altough
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Although
 opponents argue that
internet
access
 may be considered a service that should be paid for, it can be said that not having it is clearly a great disadvantage not only in academic contexts but
also
 in social ones. It has
became
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 a public service and since arguably everyone needs it, ministries should find ways to make it possible even for those who cannot afford it. Social media platforms are fundamental in order to be not left out by others, and
internet
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 connection allows
people
 to remain in touch even when physically distant. In the final analysis, it appears clear that letting online
access
 unlimited to everyone is a requirement for the present world necessities and
that is
 why I firmly believe that a right to
access
to
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the
internet
 must be provided by governments.
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