people today find their lives more and more dominated by their jobs To what extent do you agree or disagree
Currently, there is no denying the fact that
work
has become more controlling in many nations. From my perspectives
, I strongly support the statement that society has been strongly affected by the Fix the agreement mistake
perspective
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extreme
This
essay will discuss my point of view and show why I support this
statement.
on one hand, communities have been negatively affected by the increase of
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in
work
stress
. People become less socialize
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social
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members
tend
to avoid any social activities because they are more Change the verb form
tends
stress
and need to relax. Indeed, Replace the word
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it is clear that
the increase in work
stress
affected the public negatively as people feel stress
and have no time to enjoy family life.
Another point to consider is that dominating Wrong verb form
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work
may compromise public health. Many directors overwhelm their employee
by giving them extra Fix the agreement mistake
employees
work
. As result, this
might affect the well being
of the person and cause many diseases. To illustrate, a prestigious journal published that 30% of the employee in Add a hyphen
well-being
the
big companies have been affected by stroke as Correct article usage
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result
of Add an article
a result
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a high
work load
. In short, Correct your spelling
workload
it is clear that
the increase in work load
may Correct your spelling
workload
detriorate
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deteriorate
individuals
health and causes many diseases.
In conclusion, Change noun form
individuals'
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high
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a high
work load
can negatively affect society. I strongly believe that job has become increasingly controlled Correct your spelling
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inividuals
lives. As people lost family Correct your spelling
individuals
binding
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bonding
as well as
they become vulnerable to diseases. Hence
, more attention are
required.Change the verb form
is
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite