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Many believe that being good at a sport is a result of talent while others think that it comes from hard work. Discuss both use and give your reason.

#sport #talent #work #reason
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Most people perceive that being good
at
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athletes
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 is an inborn gift
whereas
 others believe it comes from consistent training. Sporting games are
one
 of the recreational activities that are accepted worldwide.
Sport
activites
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activities
such
 as basketball,
football
, volleyball etc
boosts
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 the
countries
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country's
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 economy
one
 way or the other. many people have the opinion that to be good
in
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 these activities needs frequent practising whiles others argue the point that
one
 can to born to be naturally good
in
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sport
.
This
 essay will elaborate on both views
as well as
 the reason behind
it
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.
firstly
, there is a saying that
practise
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 makes man
pefect
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perfect
 if
one
 has an
interest
for
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a
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apply
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particular sporting
activities
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activity
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, he or she can join any
sport
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 club of their
interest
 and develop
on
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their skills.
For example
 a
well known
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 Ghanaian footballer, Adanu Victor never showed
interest
 in
football
untill
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until
 he
oneday
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one day
 joined a
football
 team in his junior high school, and with regular
training
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,training
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 he entered the national team at a tender age and
now
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one
 of the
most
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greatest
footballer
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footballers
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 in Ghana and the world at large.
Conversely
, others to are born with
the
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an
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interest
 and skills in a particular skill even
at
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 infancy making them good at it. For
instant
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, sometimes it
amazing
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is amazing
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 how a
two year old
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two-year-old
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 child can be
skillful
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skilful
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 in playing
football
 with people who are above his age.
One
 may ask, how can a child at
this
 tender age manage to portray all these great
skill
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.
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 In conclusion, I believe that both regular training and talent can yield
a good results
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good results
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 so far as
sport
 is
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a concern
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concern
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concerned
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate talent
  • genetic advantages
  • physical abilities
  • reflexes
  • rigorous training
  • discipline
  • sports excellence
  • early exposure
  • quality coaching
  • nurturing talent
  • honing skills
  • mental toughness
  • psychological preparation
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