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The bar charts below demonstrates the extent of involvement in schooling and science in industrialized and developing countries between the years 1980 and 1990.

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The bar charts below demonstrate the extent of involvement in schooling and science in industrialized and developing
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 between the years 1980 and 1990.
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, it is evident that in every topic, highly developed
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 seem to have a better quantity.
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, we can see that
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 they have an exponential increase over the ten years, the other nations only developed almost the quarter amount. First of all, if we take a look at the time an average student stays in school, noticeably the youth of first
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countries
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 had a soaring stay of 9 hours in 1980,
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, still expanded by 2 years in 1990. The complete opposite of
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, the third
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countries
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' citizens spent a median of 2 hours in educational institutions and only rose by half a year.
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, we can talk about the scientists and
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 money spent on research in both types of states. The underdeveloped types of these had around 10 technicians per 1000 people in 1980, which was 30 less than the others,
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, the investment in development was an understandable 50
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 dollars and it decreased to 25
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 in 1990 in the minority
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. The contrary of
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 was occurring in first-
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world
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countries
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, with the expenditure portfolio increasing from 150
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 to 350
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.

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