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new research has shown that overeating has become a bigger problem than hanger. What are the reasons of this problem? and how could be solved?

Nowadays, a researcher found that eating a lot has more problems than suffering from
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. Many
people
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 face obesity because they eat more than the
calories
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 that person needs per day.
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 essay will describe the problems and solutions to overeating. It can be seen that buffet restaurants are more popular than in the past, particularly among young
people
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. They always spend their time with friends and colleagues for eating some
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.
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, in Thailand, younger always go to famous buffet restaurants for eating some
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,
such
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 as shabu, barbeque, and Japanese
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, every Friday night. After that, they will go to the pub to drink some alcohol.
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, several
people
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 in the Western like to eat fast
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 and get more
calories
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 than their body needs.
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, many
people
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 always eat fast
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, like burgers, KFC, and pizzas,
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 of healthy
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. They will get over
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 and
this
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 can lead them to obesity.
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, there are many methods to solve
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 problem.
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 with the 1st method,
People
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 have to change their style of eating,
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 as eating healthy
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 more than fast
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 (low fat and carbohydrate, fruit, and white meat). The 2nd is they have to reduce the frequency of eating in buffet restaurants from every Friday night to once a month. The
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 method is to exercise more than 3 times per week if it is possible. In conclusion,
people
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 may get more
calories
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 from overeating in
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 and fast
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 and it can lead to obesity.
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 they can solve
this
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 problem by eating healthy
food
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 and increasing exercise.

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