the best way to cut down crime rate is by building more prisons and giving longer sentences. do you agree or disagree? what other methods are there to control the crime rate?
Nowadays,one of the most controversial issues around the world is crime, we can gain the desired result.
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criminals
is by building numerous prisons and keeping criminals
for a long time to make society
safe from crimes.In my ,perspective this
is not an appropriate idea and I will explain in detail in this
essay with some possible solutions.
To begin
with there are many factors that keeping offenders for a long time is not an appropriate idea.First of all criminals
with minor crimes during their sentences might be familiar with some dangerous people
or gangs such
as murderers or smugglers and they encourage to follow them as a guide. Furthermore
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criminals
during long periods of their imprisonment may harm mentally and physically and lost
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people
in society
and their families when they are released from jail.
In order to solve this
problem the government's duties should not be taken lightly.Firstly
the government should increase awareness of people
and let them know about the consequences of their behaviour for themselves and their families and their society
for example
authorities can teach people
in society
and schools through lessons,tv programmes, and social media. In addition
, authorities because of their legislation can make enormous job opportunities to persuade people
to be a positive citizens
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parents have a vital role to support and control their children to avoid them doing wrong actions. Add a comma
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For instance
, they should limit and monitor the time that their children watch or play violent video games or films.Because this
type of activity leads them to be more aggressive and follow some negative action
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To sum up
, the government should pass strict laws for prisoners during their imprisonment, create jobs or activities for their people
and increase their awareness with some useful programs in society
and schools. besides
that, parents have a crucial obligation to shape their children. with the
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