The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.

The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.
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The table given indicates the reasons that motivate adults in the United Kingdom to be present at
arts
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events
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. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, the majority of
people
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attend
arts
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events
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to meet a particular performer or artist,
while
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only a small number of
people
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come because of work or business reasons. It is evident that most
people
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attend
arts
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events
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to meet their favourite performer or artist, as the figure remained relatively stable at 55% to 58% over the 20-year period.
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, there is a decreasing trend of
people
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going to
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for either special occasions or celebrations. It was actually a quite popular reason back
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, but the figure had dropped from 27% to 20% ten years ago before dropping to 9% recently.
On the other hand
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, there is an increasing trend regarding coming to
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events
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for accompanying children and work or business purposes. 20 years ago, only 6% of
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attended
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events
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for work or business
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, but the number has risen significantly to 11% now.
In addition
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to that, more and more
people
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coming to
into
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apply
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arts
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events
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to accompany their children, as the number had been gradually increasing from 9% to 15% before
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hitting 24%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words arts, events, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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