The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.
The table given indicates the reasons that motivate adults in the United Kingdom to be present at
arts
events
. Looking from an overall
perspective, the majority of people
attend arts
events
to meet a particular performer or artist, while
only a small number of people
come because of work or business reasons.
It is evident that most people
attend arts
events
to meet their favourite performer or artist, as the figure remained relatively stable at 55% to 58% over the 20-year period. However
, there is a decreasing trend of people
going to events
for either special occasions or celebrations. It was actually a quite popular reason back then
, but the figure had dropped from 27% to 20% ten years ago before dropping to 9% recently.
On the other hand
, there is an increasing trend regarding coming to arts
events
for accompanying children and work or business purposes. 20 years ago, only 6% of people
attended arts
events
for work or business events
, but the number has risen significantly to 11% now. In addition
to that, more and more people
coming to into
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arts
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art
events
to accompany their children, as the number had been gradually increasing from 9% to 15% before finally
hitting 24%.Submitted by emailgadungan28 on
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