Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Dicuss both views and give your opinion ?

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, people having varieties of
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like in order to get a good carrier in future either should go to work
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. Presently, more than 80% of
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population
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parents supporting their children to have a
degree
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in reputed
colleges
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. Here, in upcoming paragraphs explained how much
education
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plays a role in carrier growth. In
todays
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life, every
children
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creates a target
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studying in school. During
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itself
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will find a path
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successful growth. So, parents were taking action to
be
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graduate
in
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top
colleges
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,
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most
of
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private
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companies seeking
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an employee
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employee
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employees
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who have
atleats
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at least
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minimum graduation
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particular
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field.
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field
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the supervisor will take
individual
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an individual
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who gave
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degree
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on
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civil engineering.
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level
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of
education
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,
company
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will pay the salary. In
public
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sector, if we want to write
exam
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atleast
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at least
required any
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to apply for
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the examination
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.
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,
education
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which
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apply
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plays
important
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an important
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role to get
dream
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job.
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case
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of
person
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who works at
early
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stage without any college
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will be knowing more about the job.
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comparing
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compared
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to educated people they might know more about
work life
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work-life
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how
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and how
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to handle circumstances but when it comes to
high paying
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high-paying
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companies
along with
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experience
education
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will
matters
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more.
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to certain extent growth might be stabilised as
straight
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line. Currently, students
choosing
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authorised
colleges
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or
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abroad
for
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to
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study
inorder
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in order
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to get high payment
in
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MNC companies.
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, it is important to study in
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colleges
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college
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to make a bright future. In conclusion, I would like to provide my opinion as to have
a successful carrier children
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successful carrier children
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should choose
colleges
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not only for getting
degree
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certificates but
also
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fo
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to
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build up a behavioural attitude and good communication
skill
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skills
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across
the
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apply
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people.
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