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7. In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society?

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Parents
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 expect their toddlers to spend
time
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 in their studies as it would be beneficial for their future afterwards.
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, it has a negative effect on
children
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. We will be discussing
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 with, it is the responsibility of the
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 to spend
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 with their
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as well as
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 to upbring ing of their career. So
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 led to a debate about whether the
children
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 need to have freedom or expect their
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 to their
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 on their studies.
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, studying more has
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 resulted in exhaustion as they study after school hours. In
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 situation, the
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 have the option to choose whether to choose to study or skip that by doing some other activity.
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 has negatively impacted some students as become more irritated towards listening to their
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 and had caused the
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 to furious towards more
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schools the school management expects their students to be part of the extra classes and do the homework whichever they have asked to do. By
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, the students have very less
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 throughout the day which had
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 impacted their health sometimes. All and all it is
parents
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' responsibility to give free
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 to their
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 by asking them either to play outside or spend their free as they wish.
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