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to what extent do you agree or disagree that all university students should learn history?

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Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion on whether
university
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students
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 should learn
history
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. In
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 that only
students
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 with certain majors should take
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history
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 course,
while
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 others hold a different view against it. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that all
students
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colleges should take
history
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 as a required subject. Learning
history
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 is undoubtedly beneficial for the
all-round
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 development
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 every
university
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 student. It is through
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historical events that
students
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 improve their ability of critical thinking, which
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 them better understand what is happening now.
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, unlike high school,
students
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 in college are from a wide variety of
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 backgrounds, owing different beliefs and values.
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, learning
history
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 could strengthen the understanding of each other, promoting mutual communication and cooperation. Rather than personal development, learning
history
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also
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 plays an important role in the heritage of traditional culture and the flourishment of modern culture.
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, flying dance, which originated from the Tang Dynasty of China and has remained as painted murals in the Dunhuang Grottoes, has become widely popular in recent years.
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Audience
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 all over the world could not obtain
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extraordinary visual enjoyment without the research of Dunhuang
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, some people argue that learning
history
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 is a
behavior
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 of time wasting for
university
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students
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.
Students
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 should pay more attention
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 practical skills,
such
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computer
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, English, and so on, which could help them become more competitive when applying for a job. In a nutshell, though
history
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 is not a practical course in job marketing, it could not only strengthen personal development but
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, I firmly voted that all
students
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 in
university
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 should take
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history
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a history
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course
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courses
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.

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