People who read for pleasure in their free time have a better imagination than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of people believe that reading is the best form of de-stressing and indulging in

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creative side of

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compared to those watching television in pass

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. I completely agree

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that reading leads to better imagination than watching TV. To start, reading books is one of the best

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a person could indulge

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inculcate for life. Not only it enhances your vocabulary and language learning techniques but

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develops your imaginary skills. Recent studies conducted by The Times of India

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reported that reading books from a young age benefits children to have a more creative and innovative mindset.

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readers it increases the ability to think

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situations

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different perspectives.

For instance

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reading a fictional book like a murder mystery novel one starts imagining characters,

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of the story

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the scenes in front of their eyes as if it is happening in

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time

. The other primary reason is that reading

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stress and gives chance to learn and explore new subjects which can become a great conversation starter in public. It is believed that a person who is a

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is more intellectual and focused in his life.

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, in earlier times when media and television were not invented people wrote beautiful poems and manuscripts only with their imagination about the future. I personally think that in today’s world, watching television in spare

time

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improve one’s creativity and imaginary thinking, provided that the shows are educational and not only entertainment based or violent in nature.

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, I would argue that both reading and watching media can lead to great imagination

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into account how one perceive shows broadcasted on TV.

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People who read for pleasure in their free time have a better imagination than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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