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People who read for pleasure in their free time have a better imagination than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
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 of people believe that reading is the best form of de-stressing and indulging in
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 a pleasurable activity in your free
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 increases
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 creative side of
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the brain
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 compared to those watching television in pass
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. I completely agree
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 that reading leads to better imagination than watching TV. To start, reading books is one of the best
hobby
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 a person could indulge
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 inculcate for life. Not only it enhances your vocabulary and language learning techniques but
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 develops your imaginary skills. Recent studies conducted by The Times of India
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 reported that reading books from a young age benefits children to have a more creative and innovative mindset.
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 books do not provide a visual effect to
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 readers it increases the ability to think
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about various
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 situations
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 different perspectives.
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 reading a fictional book like a murder mystery novel one starts imagining characters,
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 of the story
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 the scenes in front of their eyes as if it is happening in
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time
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. The other primary reason is that reading
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 stress and gives chance to learn and explore new subjects which can become a great conversation starter in public. It is believed that a person who is a
book-freak
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book freak
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 is more intellectual and focused in his life.
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, in earlier times when media and television were not invented people wrote beautiful poems and manuscripts only with their imagination about the future. I personally think that in today’s world, watching television in spare
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 can
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 improve one’s creativity and imaginary thinking, provided that the shows are educational and not only entertainment based or violent in nature.
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, I would argue that both reading and watching media can lead to great imagination
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 into account how one perceive shows broadcasted on TV.
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