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Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that nowadays the violence and crime rate has increased over the
last
 few years
due to
 several reasons. The question is does children's violent
games
 have a significant impact on
this
 increment? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of crime reasons, violent
games
 are one causative factor out of many. The main reason to support
this
 claim is that kids tend to be exposed to many circumstances in their developing phase. To illustrate, when a child plays very violent video
games
 he develops aggressive
behaviors
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behaviours
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 that can affect his psychological traits.
Moreover
, when kids are exposed to very violent scenes like killing, ripping, and using different kinds of weapons these actions may increase their probability to commit crimes in the future.
for example
, one of my
colleges
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 in primary school was obsessed with murder video
games
 when he was a child and he ended up in the precision
due to
 his aggressive and violent actions with his neubrohoods. In conclusion,
although
 some people believe violent
games
 are the dominant reason. other reasons should be taken seriously.
Therefore
 I believe that parents should put a lot of effort to tackle
this
 problem.
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