University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages.

The ever-increasing trend of university
students
going
to
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abroad for the purpose of
education
raise some debates. From
connoisseur's
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a connoisseur's
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point of view,
this
trend has both merits and demerits.
However
, from my standpoint, the drawbacks never outweigh the benefits.
To begin
with,
education
is a basic human right and there should be no border between
students
and
education
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educators
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. Without achieving
education
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an education
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no one can succeed and survive in
hisr
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his
this
life. Unfortunately, some countries,
specially
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the underdeveloped and developing ones cannot be able to provide quality higher
education
to
the
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students
.
Therefore
,
students
intend to leave their countries to achieve higher
education
and after achieving degrees from abroad they come back with better skills and
trainnings
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trainings
training
.
These
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education
can help them to flourish in their professional lives and prove their efficiencies in several fields
for
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example,
engeneering
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engineering
, medicine, nursing,
business
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and business
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. A recent study based
on
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India demonstrates that
,
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there
are
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a huge difference between the performances of employers who achieve
education
form
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from
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abroad and those from
home
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their home
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country
.
On the contrary
, some people are against getting higher
education
abroad for
students
. The reason is a significant number of
students
are
to
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too
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interested in coming back to their
home
country
.
While
some
students
are much interested in higher
education
they do not feel the responsibilities towards their
country
and people. That's why the
home
country
ultimately
suffer
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because of worker and employer crises and so on.
However
,
this
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disadvantages do not outweigh the advantages
becasue
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because
migration
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the migration
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of people from one
country
to another reduces the population of the
home
country
.
Moreover
, the workers who were past
students
earn and send
remmitance
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remittance
remittances
to the
home
country
to build up their economy. Going abroad for higher
education
has definitely some demerits
however
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, it has some strong merits which does not outweigh the demerits. Rather
students
who go abroad for
education
can help to build up both host countries and
homeland
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their homeland
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.
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