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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 era, people are growing with the variation of
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. There is no doubt that the importance of eating is one of the main aspects of living. In my opinion, I believe that the responsibility for the
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 of
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 partly lies on the government and partly on civilians. I personally side with the former view which will be discussed in
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 with, people should invest capital to produce eating. What I mean by saying
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 is that
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 have to do business in the
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 sphere. It is important because the economic system of almost all countries cannot absolutely support all aspects of human beings
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 as building, dressing and eating. Even though the
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 of provender seems an easy and low-cost system, actually it demands a huge amount of money.
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, developed countries like USA, UK, Japan and etc. are not able to ensure the promotion of
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 to their people. Turning to the other hand of
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 of
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 and make it free for civilians
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 of supporting military staff.
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 to say that all countries around the world should come to a compromise in the United Nations and take the Declaration “On ceasing invest war and start to support people’s welfare”
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 legislation act let human beings happier and less suffer from starvation.
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, to be full is better than war. I strongly support investing resources to make
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 free and on the population part, doing business by rising the state’s economy. Spend money wisely and try to be a piece.
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