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Some people fail in school but end being successful in life. What do you think is important i n life-performing well in school or being successful after school?

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an
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average, there are almost more than 35
students
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 in the class, and out of that only
few
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a few
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 are top rankers and
rest
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the rest
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 are average or below average in studies.
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 some are
backbencher
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 too, I believe
though
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that
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 these backbenchers are weak in studies
but
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still
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 they tend to have great
success
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 in their
life
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.
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above
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the above
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 essay, I am going to explain what and why it is important to
performing
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perform
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 well in
life
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 or
being
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 on the top of the ladder after
school
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. I think
,
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 the education system
which
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we have is not
practical
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 based
its
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 just a
theory
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 knowledge. So many
students
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 in
school
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 get failure there
itself
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such
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 as backbenchers. In spite of being failed, they achieve
success
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 because of the knowledge
which
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they have gained apart from
school
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 for eg: some
students
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 are really well in arts, sports, or
in
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other curricular activities. After
the
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school
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, as per their
interest
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 they choose their stream and get a successful
life
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.
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Secondly
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 the significant thing to succeed
to
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is to
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 be happy
what
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 you do.The people who
achieves
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success
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 after
school
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 mostly perform well in
life
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 as they surround themselves with more
skillsets
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. On the basis of those skills they follow their passion,
this
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 is what everyone is expecting in the end. The most meaningful thing is
students
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, who are weak in
studies
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their studies
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 enjoy their interests,
hobby
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and hobby
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 and
then
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 turns them into
passion
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a passion
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 which makes them happy and
succeed
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succeeds
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 in
life
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. In my opinion, having good communication skills and following one's passion, which is
most
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a most
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 important ingredient for
success
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,
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this
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could be the possible reason for their
success
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, education cannot guarantee
your
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success
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 or failure.

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