the line chart shows trend in terms of employment in the USA in millions
The line graph given illustrates the
employment
rate
in varying sectors in the United States over a 50-year period. Looking from an overall
perspective, it is evident that there is an increasing trend
of working in the services industry
and a fluctuating trend
of being employed in manufacturing companies, while
the employment
rate
in agriculture
industries is going downhill.
Since 1975, more and more people
have been working for
the services Change preposition
in
industry
. There were only about 10 million
people
worked
Wrong verb form
working
in
the beginning of the period before the Change the preposition
at
number
began to increase gradually, reaching 18
Correct article usage
the 18
million
figure in 1979. Moreover
, the number
started to rise significantly afterwards, as it jumped by approximately 20 million
from 1979 to 1980 and from 1980 to 1982. In addition
to that, it is predicted that the number
will keep on growing and finally
reach 90 million
employees in 2025.
On the other hand
, there is a downward trend
in the employment
rate
in the agriculture
sector
. The agriculture
sector
has been losing its popularity, as the number
of workers dropped from 80 million
in 1975 to 10 million
in 2025. At first,
the number
of employees remained stable from 1975 to 1977. However
, it began to experience a negative trend
, and it is predicted that only 10 million
people
will work in the agriculture
industry
in 2025. Regarding the employment
rate
in the manufacturing sector
, the figure actually had undergone an increase before it declined. 10 million
people
were working in the manufacturing sector
in 1975 and the employment
rate
reached a peak of 40 million
workers in 1980. However
, the number
began to decline and there will be roughly 10 million
workers in the manufacturing industry
in 2025.Submitted by emailgadungan28 on
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