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some people suggested that cars should be banned in the centrals of the large cities. Do you agree or disagree？

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Nowadays, there has been an increasing number of
vehicles
 in the central space of large cities, resulting in a lot of problems,
such
 as air pollution and
traffic
 jam.
Therefore
, some argued that the government should prohibit the usage of automobiles in
such
 fields.
This
 essay will explain why I strongly disagree with
this
 argument.
While
 it is undeniable that more and more
vehicles
 in major
city
 centres lead to more and more problems.
However
, these problems cannot be simply solved by banning
vehicles
 from entering urban fields. People's demand for
vehicles
 will not change because they are not allowed to enter the space. In
this
 way, if the number of
vehicles
 does not decrease, the air quality will not improve, and if the auto is not allowed to drive to the
city
centre
, drivers will still drive to other places, which will
also
 cause
traffic
 jams
elsewhere
. As mentioned above, people's demand for cars has not disappeared. There are more job opportunities in the
city
centre
, so more people need to go to the downtown space to work. If cars are banned from entering the
city
centre
, commuters who live far away need to spend more time in
traffic
, when they arrived at the office, they would feel very tired, which affects their work efficiency. What is worse, it is true that most hospitals and other institutions are in the
city
centre
. If someone is sick and needs to go to the hospital for treatment, the patient may delay treatment or even lose his/her life because
vehicles
 cannot enter the
city
centre
. In conclusion, based on the above analysis and evidence,
although
 more and more cars in the
city
centre
 will lead to air pollution and
traffic
 jam, these can be improved by charging congestion fees and encouraging the use of new energy
vehicles
.
Therefore
, I don't think auto should be banned in the
centre
 of big cities.
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