More and more qualified peopleare moving from poor to rich countiries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering. computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countires are tealing from poor countires. Other feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Discouss both the views and give your opinion.

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other countries

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knowledge with each other.

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not good for them.

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