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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment, governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
These days it is necessary to talk about
improve
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 the environment. so, some people think that only
governments
 and huge
companies
 can make a difference,
while
 others believe that anyone can make it.
this
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
in
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one
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 hand, only
governments
 and giant
companies
 can develop
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 because they have
ability
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 to do that.
For example
, large
companies
 can fund any project to improve the environment,
also
the
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governments
 have a lot of employees and sources that can use them to do some plans. So,
thats
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 why some think that only these two categories can improve the
environments
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.
on the other hand
, any individual
work
 can improve in environments because
team
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 works start from
one
 person and
one
 idea. To illustrate, when we want to clean our
neighborhood
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 we need just
one
 person to tell us
this
 plan
also
this
 person will encourage other people to start cleaning .
Hence
 the belief that any individual
work
 can improve in environments.
In
addition
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 to
improve
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 the
environment
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 we should cooperate together. For
an
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instance,
the
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governments
,
companies
 and hand
work
 should
work
 side by side to do many projects that will develop our climate.
This
 proves clearly that there are
not
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no
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 big
change
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changes
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 without atomic works. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both points of
views
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, I believe that a group of small
works
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 will create a big
work
 so we will have an amazing achievement and legacy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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