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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment, governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
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These days it is necessary to talk about
improve
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 the environment. so, some people think that only
governments
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 and huge
companies
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 can make a difference,
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 others believe that anyone can make it.
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 hand, only
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 and giant
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 can develop
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enviroment
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environment
 because they have
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 to do that.
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, large
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 can fund any project to improve the environment,
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governments
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 have a lot of employees and sources that can use them to do some plans. So,
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 why some think that only these two categories can improve the
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.
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, any individual
work
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 can improve in environments because
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 works start from
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 person and
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 idea. To illustrate, when we want to clean our
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 we need just
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 person to tell us
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 plan
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 person will encourage other people to start cleaning .
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 the belief that any individual
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 can improve in environments.
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addition
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 the
environment
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 we should cooperate together. For
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instance,
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governments
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,
companies
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 and hand
work
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 should
work
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 side by side to do many projects that will develop our climate.
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 proves clearly that there are
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 big
change
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 without atomic works. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both points of
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, I believe that a group of small
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 will create a big
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 so we will have an amazing achievement and legacy.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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