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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.
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The line graph illustrates the
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probability of Australian
exports
 of 4 countries
in
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between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that Japan and India decreased
the
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Australian
exports
 over the period. In General, China and India experienced upsurged percentage of Australian
exports
, starting the export in 1990 and
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 up in 2012.
Whereas
 Japan and US
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declined around
in
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2012.
This
 is how China became one of the
most
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top
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 to export
in
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 Australia. At the beginning of the year
in
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1990, the
amount
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 of
exports
of
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china climbed significantly faster within 25 years as compared to Japan which fluctuated slightly by every 5 years and dropped in 2012. With regards to the percentage of
exports
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US began
with
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 11 in 1990 and decreased until 1995
then
 suddenly peaked again at around 11 in 2000 and
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the
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2010 it fell gradually.
On the other hand
,
india
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India
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 was stable from 1990 to 2000 and rise gradually
at the end
 of the year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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