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Some people believe that education and healthcare should be free of charge and funded by the government. Others think that it should be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today, it is a common belief that
education
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 and
healthcare
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 may be free of charge and financed by the state. Whilst some think that they can not do it since many
people
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 pay for these services. I believe that it is financed by the state because many
people
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 can not afford to pay for
education
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. Both views will be discussed in
this
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 essay. As for the first aspect, It can not be denied that
these
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apply
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services like free
education
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,
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healthcare
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and healthcare
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 are the basis for the well-being of citizens.
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, the law about free
education
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 and getting free health insurance, in
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 law says that every child has the
possibilities
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possibility
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 of receiving primary and secondary
education
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 on a free basis.
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,
people
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 are literate, the equality of
education
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 is higher and the unemployment rate decreases.
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, free
healthcare
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 improves the quality of health because of that the attribute of work will
also
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 increase. Regarding the second viewpoint, many countries face problems with
education
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 and
healthcare
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due to
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 their barriers and because of barriers they can not reach a new level of development.
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, at the time
COVID-19
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of COVID-19
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 in
Thailand
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,Thailand
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 all students had no possibility of studying since their parents struggled with financial difficulties.
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, when COVID-19 is in full swing the hospital has no place. In the end, the government opened a paid hospital and out of desperation,
people
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 paid for it.
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,
financed
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financing
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 by the state is good for
people
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 who have no opportunities. The governments can do some actions
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, help pupils
for
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with
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 their health and
education
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.
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