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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Few people believe that
children
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 should commence their schooling from an early
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;
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, some argue that they should
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 wait till they become seven years old. In
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 increasing academic competition
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 it has become a need of time to start the education of young ones from
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an early
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 stage of their life. If
children
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 are not encouraged they might end up spending their time in front of
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television sets or
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.
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, it has become a difficult task for
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working parents to take care of
children
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 and constantly entertain them. Even though the increased syllabus might lead to
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 in tension and stress amongst
children
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, it will provide them
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 opportunity to learn skills faster and better.
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, a recent study from
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Oxford reported that kids are able to learn quickly and have
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immense grasping power from
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age
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.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 who are admitted to school at
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age
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 of seven or more develop
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 understanding of subject knowledge rather than when initiated earlier in life. Researchers have concluded that
age
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 is directly proportional to the developmental phase of
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 and cognitive thinking. On top of that,
children
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 are more likely to visit schools once they understand its concept and start making friends. In my opinion, I will argue that
children
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 should begin their formal educational journey once they are mature enough to grasp and understand various subjects taught by teachers. In conclusion,
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 of the
children
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 is an important aspect before
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the commencement
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 of their formal education.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • social development
  • structured learning environments
  • essential skills
  • reading, writing, and arithmetic
  • social norms
  • undue stress and pressure
  • natural curiosity and creativity
  • unstructured play
  • emotional and psychological development
  • mature
  • rigors of formal education
  • natural developmental timeline
  • life skills
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • informal learning
  • structured educational system
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