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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Few people believe that
children
 should commence their schooling from an early
age
;
whereas
, some argue that they should
atleast
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at least
 wait till they become seven years old. In
this
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due to
 increasing academic competition
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 it has become a need of time to start the education of young ones from
early
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an early
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 stage of their life. If
children
 are not encouraged they might end up spending their time in front of
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television sets or
smart phones
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.
Moreover
, it has become a difficult task for
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working parents to take care of
children
 and constantly entertain them. Even though the increased syllabus might lead to
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 in tension and stress amongst
children
, it will provide them
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 opportunity to learn skills faster and better.
For instance
, a recent study from
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Oxford reported that kids are able to learn quickly and have
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immense grasping power from
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age
.
On the other hand
,
children
 who are admitted to school at
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age
 of seven or more develop
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 understanding of subject knowledge rather than when initiated earlier in life. Researchers have concluded that
age
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 and cognitive thinking. On top of that,
children
 are more likely to visit schools once they understand its concept and start making friends. In my opinion, I will argue that
children
 should begin their formal educational journey once they are mature enough to grasp and understand various subjects taught by teachers. In conclusion,
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 of the
children
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 of their formal education.
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