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The maps below show Pancha Village in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show Pancha Village in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given map illustrates the comparison between the construction appearance of Pancha village in 2005 and 2015. It is evident that the transformation took place at almost the whole location including
school
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the school
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, pagoda, and the areas both
at
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in
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left
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the left
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 and right direction of the
road
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.
To begin
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 with, it can be seen from the
road
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 itself,
compared
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that compared
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 to the prior, new different materials were used to establish it in 2015.
Moreover
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, there was the construction of power poles on the
road
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's left side. The subsequent change was that the region on the left-corner side of the
road
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 was added by two towers. The structure of property in the market was
also
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 altered, and the quantity of them was added as well by two
buildings
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. Moving to the opponent side, several novel
buildings
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 were established and some of the previous
buildings
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 were demolished. In detail, the school area
had
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apply
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no longer consisted of a primary institution,
instead
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, there were secondary schools afterwards.
In similarity
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 with the earlier, at the pagoda area, it is perceived that there was the construction of a new pagoda.
Additionally
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, the two
buildings
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 nearby the
road
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 were demolished.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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