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Some people think that tourists should follow the traditional customs of the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the
countries
 that host have traditional should the visitor follow that. But what is the most effective method for dealing with
this
 is that the tourists who come should know more about
this
country
 and how the
people
 deal with each other. Some
people
 believe that the
countries
 that they will visit should not tell them that it's necessary to follow the
traditions
. I completely agree, in
this
,
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essay I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, in some
countries
, they do not wear oversized clothes.
For instance
, here in Saudia Arabia, we should wear an Abaya or clothes that are oversized
while
 other
countries
 do not like will be unique. Another reason why I agreed is that there are
countries
 that have a Muslim religion. Take EID as an example. I strongly believe that
this
 is the most important thing on Christmas day we celebrate with others because we are all
people
 the same in EID we should if we are in a Muslim
country
 to celebrate. What is more, we like all religions.
On the other hand
, I think it is a little bit hard to follow all the
traditions
 I know .
However
, sometimes we should follow the important things.
As a result
, it will be more comfortable for
people
 from the same
country
 and visitors. In conclusion,
although
 it is a common belief that visitors should follow the
traditions
. I believe that they can do it,
also
 they will be happy with our
traditions
. personally, I think even if I go to another
country
 I am going to respect their
traditions
as well as
 I can.
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