the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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from a bar chart which illustrates the total time of telephone calls in three different categories in the UK.
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, The
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of the fixed line for local calls rose first five
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and slightly decreased in 21th-century. Meanwhile, for international and national calls numbers are continuously going up and for mobile calls after 21th-century
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of mobiles rapidly increased. Notably, between 1995 and 1998 local calls grew
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30 billion minutes doubled time
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national and international calls which
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slightly increased. Next with mobiles, more than doubled in that time but stands the least in the term of
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with nearly 10 minutes in 1998.
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to that, By 1999 national and international calls were 50 minutes and slightly increased to 60 in 2002. There was a rapid increase in the
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of mobiles more than tripled
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decreased slowly over years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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