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Some people like to try new new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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There has always been a debate in
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society that
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 whether
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 should try new
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 I totally understand the feeling on why some of them are fearing the unknown. In my opinion,
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 should explore as much as they can. It is undeniable that sticking to familiar
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 has led one to become a professional in the fields that bring confidence to us. The skills become expertise by doing it over and over in the long term. To give an example, most companies are looking for experienced workers in their sector to reduce failure and offer higher salaries to senior workers.
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, many become lazy and refuse to walk out of their comfort zone because discovering new skills will require a lot of hardships.
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 lost their creativity in lifestyles, work and relationships. On the other side, some
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 felt excited about the daily challenge and achievement. They prefer something new and different because it brings satisfaction when you overcome obstacles.
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, research showed that the majority of visitors felt happy and enjoyed when they explored a new country.
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 who loved to try out new
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 have a positive view of life. They tend to be joyful over a new opportunity coming
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 new solutions and experiences. In conclusion, some
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 keep doing the same old
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 to avoid disappointment.
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 I personally like those who like to try new
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 because they have a positive view of life.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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