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The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The image downward described the step in the recycling of
aluminium
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drinks
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cans
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.
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, there are three
stages
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 of the process, beginning from the collection centre and
finished
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finishing
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 to
become
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becoming
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 a new can and
send
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sending
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 it back to the
drinks
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 machine.
At
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In
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 the first
stages
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, after the
cans
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 were consumed from the drink machine,
it
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they
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 moved to the collection centre. At
this
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 place, the
cans
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separated
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are separated
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 into two categories,
aluminium
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 and steel. After
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being sorted
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sorted
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sorting
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 based on the materials, the
cans
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 are transported to the recycling centre where the second
stages
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 begin. At these
stages
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, the package gathered for some amount and
then
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 moulded into a big solid cube.
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last
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stages
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stage
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, the
cans
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 are carried to an
aluminium
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 recycling plant.
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this
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 step, the cube of old
aluminium
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 is melted down and
then
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 moulded
to
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into
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 a new
aluminium
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 bar. Afterwards, the bar transforms into the roll form. In the end, the roll is shaped
to
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into
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the
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a
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 new can where it can be filled
by
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with
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 the
drinks
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 and returned to the
drinks
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 machine.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, drinks, cans, stages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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