The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The image downward described the step in the recycling of
aluminium
drinks
cans
.
Overall
, there are three
stages
of the process, beginning from the collection centre and
finished
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finishing
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to
become
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becoming
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a new can and
send
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sending
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it back to the
drinks
machine.
At
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In
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the first
stages
, after the
cans
were consumed from the drink machine,
it
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they
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moved to the collection centre. At
this
place, the
cans
separated
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are separated
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into two categories,
aluminium
and steel. After
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being sorted
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sorted
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sorting
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based on the materials, the
cans
are transported to the recycling centre where the second
stages
begin. At these
stages
, the package gathered for some amount and
then
moulded into a big solid cube.
The
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last
stages
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stage
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, the
cans
are carried to an
aluminium
recycling plant.
On
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this
step, the cube of old
aluminium
is melted down and
then
moulded
to
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into
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a new
aluminium
bar. Afterwards, the bar transforms into the roll form. In the end, the roll is shaped
to
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into
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the
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a
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new can where it can be filled
by
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with
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the
drinks
and returned to the
drinks
machine.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, drinks, cans, stages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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