the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

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it is clear that

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the production of

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increased significantly in both France and Australia from 1980 to 2000.

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, the french burns the most coal to produce service in both years

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Australians replace nuclear power with natural gas to create electricity in 2000. As can be seen, in 1980 in Australia, coal accounted for the highest figure, at 50

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hydro and nuclear power had a similar number, at 20

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, these figures are much higher than the volume of

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produced by oil, at only 10

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. The year 2000 witnessed an increase in the supply of

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produced by coal at 130 groups, compared to 36 systems of hydropower. In France, the main sources of produced

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in 1980 were coal and natural gas, at 25

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oil’s figure was slightly lower by 5

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. In 2000, there was a dramatic increase in the volume of

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by nuclear to 126

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. Meanwhile, oil and coal had the same figures, at 25 entities. The figures for hydropower and natural gas fall significantly, at 2

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for both categories.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Electricity production
Fuel source
Renewable sources
Non-renewable sources
Significant change
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Dominant source
Introduction of new sources
Reliance
Electricity production mix
Environmental implications
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the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. to what extent do you agree or disagree?