the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the production of
heat
increased significantly in both France and Australia from 1980 to 2000.
Additionally
, the french burns the most coal to produce service in both years
while
Australians replace nuclear power with natural gas to create electricity in 2000. As can be seen, in 1980 in Australia, coal accounted for the highest figure, at 50
units
,
whereas
hydro and nuclear power had a similar number, at 20
units
.
However
, these figures are much higher than the volume of
heat
produced by oil, at only 10
units
. The year 2000 witnessed an increase in the supply of
heat
produced by coal at 130 groups, compared to 36 systems of hydropower. In France, the main sources of produced
heat
in 1980 were coal and natural gas, at 25
units
,
whereas
oil’s figure was slightly lower by 5
units
. In 2000, there was a dramatic increase in the volume of
heat
by nuclear to 126
units
. Meanwhile, oil and coal had the same figures, at 25 entities. The figures for hydropower and natural gas fall significantly, at 2
units
for both categories.
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  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
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  • Non-renewable sources
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