In spite of the advancements made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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and harvesting have made remarkable progress over the years but people are still starving in poor
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • logistical
  • economic barriers
  • imbalance
  • exacerbates
  • food wastage
  • retailer levels
  • trade policies
  • agricultural subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable farming practices
  • international cooperation
  • fair-trade agreements
  • community-based
  • precision agriculture
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