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In spite of the advancements made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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 and harvesting have made remarkable progress over the years but people are still starving in poor
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 resulting in a hungry and starving nation. Another reason might be poor transport facilities in the
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 areas. The crops when cultivated require transportation by air, road or
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • logistical
  • economic barriers
  • imbalance
  • exacerbates
  • food wastage
  • retailer levels
  • trade policies
  • agricultural subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable farming practices
  • international cooperation
  • fair-trade agreements
  • community-based
  • precision agriculture
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