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Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?

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Two different types of education strategies have aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
 issue in question may be,
although
 there are good arguments in favour of all-around education, I personally believe that providing an
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environment
 for
students
 to
focue
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focus
 on
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 subject would bring them more benefits. Of all advantages of
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 range of
subjects
, probably the first pop-up in my mind is that pupils would have more
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knowledge
 from different fields for the purpose of finding their
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subjects
.
For example
, many children do not know what fields they are interested in or have strengths in. Comprehensive courses provided a chance of accepting
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 information from
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different
 areas which in turn
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students
 to find out their developmental direction. Despite the aforementioned advantages, I still believe that schools should make
students
 focus on certain
subjects
 for several reasons. Probably the most significant one is that schools should only invest their resource into those aspects that their
pupils'
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strenght
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strength
 of.
For instance
, everyone is born with
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different
 talents and weaknesses. If
students
 can
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 more time on those
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subjects
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 they are good at, they would have more
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 in the future.
By contrast
, learning in areas of weakness is waste of time since they might never
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 in that area. Under
this
 line of thinking, all-around education would help young folks to find their strengths,
however
, focusing on a few
subjects
 would bring them a higher accomplishment. So, I believe that certain
subjects
 would bring us more benefits.
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