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It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#movie #theater #neighborhood #support #plan
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Following the announcement from my neighbourhood, the cinema might be constructed near my home.
Although
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this
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 project will be ideal for citizens near here because we can get closer to the entertainment activities,
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, built a new
movie
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theatre
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 can create trash and dirtiness and disturb people's daily schedule, so, I do not support
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 project.
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, the cleanliness of the town
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, while the movie theatre is set up,
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 the
movie
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theatre
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 is set up might be affected.
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, during working hours, the workers might process rubbish or trash from the food they ate.
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, the environment staff only are here third times a week but to construct the
movie
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theatre
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, workers should work 5 days a week. With the number of rubbish people produced and the minor tendency of environmental staff, it challenging to ensure
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cleanliness nearby.
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, the working timetable of the cinema might affect people's daily schedules. Normally, the
movie
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theatre
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 will open from 10:00 till midnight, the noise from the
theatre
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 from customers might make the neighbourhood distracted or meet insomnia which leads to breaking their schedule for the next day.
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, having a
movie
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theatre
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 will provide
relaxation
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 entertainment
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 make our town more convenient,
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, the doubt about the dirtiness and how to ensure the scenery's cleanliness
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 setting up the
theatre
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as well as
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 the showing hours of the
theatre
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 still make me hard to accept
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 event.
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