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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this.

There are many problems in developing
countries
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declining
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the declining
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quality
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 of
air
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 and
water
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industry
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 and
construction
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. So, to prevent
this
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problem
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 they should build
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landfill
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a landfill
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 and
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eco-friendly
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ingredient
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.
Industry
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 and
construction
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 should make
landfill
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 to decrease big
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problem
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problems
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 like
water
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 pollution and declining
air
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quality
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 in developing
countries
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,
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minimalize
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 health
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problem
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problems
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.
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 is because, many
construction
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 and
industry
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 do not have
good
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a good
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landfill
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, they just dispose
their
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of their
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 waste in the
river
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 and spread out
fog
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the fog
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 in the
air
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 without any process as
filter
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a filter
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.
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,
K
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industry
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throw
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throws
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 their waste
in
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into
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 the
river
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that
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which
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cause
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causes
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 biota on the
river
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died
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 and people that live
in
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on
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 the side of
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river
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the river
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 cannot utilise
for
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it for
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drink
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drinking
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 and fishing. It can be
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a danger
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danger
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 for people, they can be
contamination
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contaminated
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from
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by
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 waste toxic. If
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industry
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the industry
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build
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builds
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landfill
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 it can decrease the number of
pollutions
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pollution
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Declining
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The declining
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quality
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 of
air
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 and
water
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 pollution in many developing
countries
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 are
cause
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caused
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 by
industry
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 and
construction
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 activities can
be solve
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 by using
eco-friendly
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ingredient
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. Putting it more simply,
eco-friendly
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ingredient
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 does not create
negative
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a negative
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 impact
for
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environment
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the environment
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 and
it
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apply
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more
save
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 rather
that
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than
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ingredient
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 that can make
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problem
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a problem
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 for
environment
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the environment
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, producing
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straw
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 from paper is more eco-friendly than using
plastic
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a plastic
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straw
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 because when people finish using
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straw
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 they will throw
it
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in to
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rubbish
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the rubbish
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 and
straw
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that
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make
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made
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 from paper will
be dissolve
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 but
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a straw
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straw
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straws
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 from
plastic
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the plastic
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 cannot
degradation
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. They should burn the plastic
straw
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and
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as
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 it can make
air
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quality
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 decrease. In conclusion, to prevent
declining
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the declining
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quality
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 of
air
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 and
water
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 from
industry
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 and
construction
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 in developing
countries
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 they should build
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landfill
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a landfill
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 and
using
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use
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eco-friendly
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the eco-friendly
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ingredient
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ingredients
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. If possible,
industry
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 and
construction
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 should strengthen
regulation
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regulations
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 that
have
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has
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impact
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an impact
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for
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on
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environment
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the environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution control regulations
  • emissions
  • discharges
  • green technology incentives
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable materials
  • waste management policies
  • recycling processes
  • environmental monitoring
  • compliance with environmental standards
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental protection
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • modern building techniques
  • international environmental organizations
  • air and water quality management
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