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The best way to solve world’s traffic and environmental problems is increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion?

#world’s #traffic #cost #fuel
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In recent times, the traffic and environmental issues had grew considerably, some propose that authorities should rise the
fuel
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 prices in order to solve these problems. In
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 essay, I will elucidate why I believe it is an ideal solution. to commence, rising
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 prices is a perfect solution for several reasons,
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as
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 prices spike that will impact the use of vehicles that consume oil,
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, the trend will be toward electric vehicles, which in the end will lead to pollution reduction as traditionally
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 cars contribute massively to pollution by emitting detrimental gases that affect people and animal health harmfully,
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, less green house's gases that affect the environment and increase the global warming,
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 several research studies conducted by Tokyo university, 55% of air pollution in Tokyo city attributed to the consume of petrol and diesel,
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, rising the ordinary
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 cost certainly, is the right step.
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, as
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 will be expensive, the population will tend to abandon cars and look for alternative solutions
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 as cycling or using electric means of transportation which are widespread today as a clear example is electric scooters,
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, less crowding as fewer cars will be in the streets.
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, traffic congestion and environmental issues have immense harmful effects on people's and animal's life
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 the environment,
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, the use of ordinary
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 vehicles should be reconsidered and the trend should be toward electric means,
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 step only gain through rising the
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 fees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • carpooling
  • electric vehicles
  • sustainable transport
  • pollution
  • infrastructure
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • inequitable solution
  • inflation
  • multi-pronged approach
  • urban planning
  • commuting
  • dependence
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