Some people today believe that the world's increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis.Other people believe that world population is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of world's economy and society. Discuss both views and give your option.

These days,
world
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population
is continuously rising in many countries. Some
people
concern
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that
this
will have negative consequences on a global scale
while
others think that there are more benefits in a multitude of nations. In
this
essay, I will describe
about
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lacks
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lack
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of natural
resouces
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resources
and good
managements
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management
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,and give my opinion. Looking at the dire view. The main effect
is decrease
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is decreasing
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in natural
resource
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because
for
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many years,
a
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plenty of natural resources are reduced dramatically since
the
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large number of
people
require them for living.
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,
It is clear that
the most
effected
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resource
is forests
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forests
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. When the towns are crowded, the majorities of inhabitants move to rural areas. They will deforest in order to
bulid
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build
residences so after the number of trees are cut , the large amount of
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
, which is absorbed by tree's leave, is emitted
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
Therefore
,
this
gas leads to
the
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global warming.
In contrast
, reflecting the good stability of the countries is
the
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positive point as the significant growth of
population
indicates the successful management of
economy
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the economy
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and society.
For instance
,
population
growth can lead to economic rise because more
people
are able to produce and buy more goods.
Consequently
, governments collect higher tax revenues which can be spent on public goods,
such
as health care and environmental projects.
To sum up
, even though
growing
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world
population
has
the
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advantages, I hold the view that the disadvantages are more dangerous. I think if the number of
people
increases equals a decrease. It will be better for all.
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