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Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old house style in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own styles. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Over the years,
people
 change
there
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 perspective
the
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 way
the
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they
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 build their
houses
. Some
people
 pattern
there
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their
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houses
 coming from western
countries
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countries'
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house
design
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designs
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. But there are some who retain the
style
 of
there
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their
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houses
same
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 as the
house
 of
there
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their
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neighbors
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, In
these
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essay
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i
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 will give my opinion on why the local
authorities
 should allow
people
 to choose the
design
 and
style
 of
there
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their
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houses
. It
make
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 sense to believe that
house
 with the same
design
, with the same sizes and
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colours
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colors
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 are very nice to say and it can boost tourism in our locality.
Moreover
 old
house
style
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styles
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 are very unique and very good architectural
design
.
For example
, there is a place in the Philippines, that place is Baguio City, there is one village there that the
design
 and
style
 of
there
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their
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houses
 are the same, so many
tourist
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tourists
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 there will go and take pictures, So
in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 local
authorities
 should consider
to retain
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retaining
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 the old
style
houses
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 want
there
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houses
, modern and different from others, because it can make them happy. If
the
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they
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 have the money to make
there
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their
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houses
 bigger and more modern, why not local
authorities
 should support them
..
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.
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For example
 in America their
houses
 there
is
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are
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 very big and very modern
design
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designs
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 because
ther
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the
 local
authorities
 support the need of
there
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their
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people
 to
built
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build
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 big and different
style
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styles
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houses
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of houses
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. So local
authorities
 should think twice about that idea. In my conclusion and honest opinion, I believe that building a
house
 with different
style
 and
design
 can make the
house
 owner who
plan
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plans
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 to build the
house
 very happy. And
also
its
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it's
it is
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 very good for the locality, And it should be supported
to
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by
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 the
people
 in the
goverenment
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government
.
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