There is more and more violence in movies and on TV, therefore it is necessary for the government to control the amount of it to decrease the violent crimes in the society. Do you agree or disagree?

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Every day an incredible amount of the population watches Television. They can see everything in

this

square box which shows

shows. And before it is will showing on

some parts of the government mechanisms do some amount of work to approve a new member of Television channels. Looking through evolution you can see humans, like violence and blood, not everyone, yet most of them, because in history every living organism needs to get a portion of food, reproduce itself and survive, so depending on

this

information logically it moves nation to don't think about blood or violence in the past. Now times have changed but some parts of evolution are still in human brains. Government works with the public and knows why it's important to show some of the crimes shown on

therefore

when society watches a violent

show, the brain decreases the level of aggression and desire to kill somebody. I'd prefer

this

strategy too,

also

works with video games when players kill each other to get fun and increase the emotional level of happiness. In my ,opinion a happy family is a good citizen!

Overall

, the government know what they do and how it will suppose on our society. Most companies today spend milliards of dollars to produce a nice film or series and publish it on

. Yes, they

also

earn money from society, but who knows how dangerous our lives will be without violence shows.

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Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

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4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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