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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondry school Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, The foreign
language
 especially English is a very popular
language
.
Moreover
, the world needs
this
language
 or any other
language
 to educate
themselves
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itself
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.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do
this
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some of the reasons why
the
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old people believe that they should it is good to learn a second
language
 in primary
school
 not in secondary
school
. Let’s begin by looking at the advantages of learning a new
language
 in primary
school
.
One
 of the main positives is that the majority of children can learn quickly in
their
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 first grade of their
school
.
For instance
, I am
one
 of the
child
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children
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 that I
was understand
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understood
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 and
memorize
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memorised
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 very quickly
till
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apply
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now but today I have a lot of things that I do so I can't remember a lot of words and I do not have much time like a child.
Secondly
, When you learn a new
language
 in small age you can
practice
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practise
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 and improve your pronunciation because you can speak daily. Take
this
 as an example,
one
 of my
friend
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friends
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she
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apply
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learn two languages Spanish and English but
the
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English in primary
school
 so she can speak very well,
While
 Spanish
not
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is not
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 that much. .
In addition
, when you learn in
small
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a small
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 age and practice you will not be afraid to talk. Turning to the other side of the argument, some
child
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children
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 have
a
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apply
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trouble
on
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with
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 their health so they cannot learn fast
this
one
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is one
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 of the disadvantages.
In other words
, they have autism they can learn quickly or speak till they become good. All things considered, studying a foreign
language
 is not that easy. You need to
weighup
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weigh up
 the pros of learning a new
language
 in the first grade, it is easy for a majority of people, and the
cons
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con
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 of the troubles of children is health. Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of children
is
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memorizing
in
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at
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 small age eventually outweigh any negatives.
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