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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast transport for cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Certain people in some
nation
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nations
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 have the view that it is important to invest huge
amount
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amounts
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 of money
on
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in
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 building new railway tracks for quick
transport
 for towns. Some perceive the capital should be used to better the already existing public
transport
.
Transport
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The transport
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 system
,
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 is an essential asset in a
country
.
In
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It
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 aids in the movement of individuals, as well
goods
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as goods
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 and commodities. The growing population of a
country
has
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lead
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 to a conflicting view on whether
investment
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 should be made
on
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 acquiring fast train lines to aid in quick locomotion or to focus on improving the existing
transport
 systems. I believe that,
inorder
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 to
releive
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relieve
 pressure on our
transpots
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transport
transports
 moods, the government, must build railways but not
to
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at
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 the expense of neglecting the old roads we have.
This
 essay will examine both views and
also
 make
me
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my
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 view known.
Firstly
, the existence of
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a train
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train
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trains
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 will boost the
econony
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economy
 of a
country
 in that, workers and traders will always be at their
work place
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workplace
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 on time
due to
the
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its
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 fast nature of it.
This
 will enhance progress in the trade of one's product and
also
increse
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increase
 productivity at the work site.
For example
, a
country
 like China has numerous underground rail lines hene making the one of the best in the business field.
Secondly
, there will be a drastic fall in
road
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a road
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 traffic
accident
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accidents
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. Though trains may sometimes be involved in crushes,
but
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it
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its
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occurance
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occurrence
 is rare. Record
have
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has
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 it that only 10 out of 10000 of them
gets
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get
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 accident per year.
Lastly
, its introduction into the city will let most owners of
car
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the car
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 park their cars. As we all know, fumes from these vehicles pollute our
environmet
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environment
.
Therefore
 when people leave their vehicles at home and join
trail
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the trail
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 track, the atmosphere will be free from harmful
substance
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substances
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.
However
, the state should
also
 make
it
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apply
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an effort to fix our bad roads. Potholes on our roads have attributed to 90% of
RTAs
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RTA
. Meaning attention must be put on fixing them. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 believe both means of
transport
, will serve the nation greatly.
However
, we must cultivate the habit of
maintenence
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maintenance
 culture.
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