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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right & as such, should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?’

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As they say,”
Education
 is the passport to the future”, it is a vivid indicator of development and
therefore
 is indispensable. I agree with the view that
education
,
in particular
, the primary level of
education
 should be free for everyone but with the intention of receiving better knowledge.
This
 essay focuses on why
education
 should be free and what we can expect from the
government
. I agree that anything which is made free, declines in
its
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apply
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value and
education
 can lose its
quality
. But it is
also
 true that people know how valuable
education
 is, and it is the only ladder to help
reach
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them reach
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 the goals they dream of. In short, if everyone gets free
education
, they at least have a chance to reach the basic level of
education
 irrespective of the
quality
. It could be their road to success and indirectly help the nation prosper.
However
, nothing comes for free. It is a stable source of earning for thousands or millions of people to support their lives. In India,
government
 schools provide free
education
 and teachers are paid a huge amount as salary. I had a six-month training in a
government
 school, where children in 8th standard are still learning English alphabets. So, the
quality
 of
education
 depends on the money one spends. So, the
government
 should take
initiatives
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 to provide
quality
education
 at affordable rates.
To conclude
, I would say that the intention of getting educated is to gain knowledge and earn a fixed promise for a better life and not do it for the sake of it. More facilities should be provided to individuals
since
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from
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 childhood, aiming at a better future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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